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A cavalcade of golden horse
Alights from out the maples' grove -
Abreast the unsown eastern fields,
They march a subtle, rising slope;
They share in banter at the square,
And ask the baker for a taste
Of breads and sweets all freshly pinched
And cooling on a window-pane;
They greet the maidens tending yards
Along the velvet uptown rows -
As if to beg a favor, knelt,
With tresses tied in buns and bows -
And press on further, slow and sure,
A touch of leisure in their gait:
Their laughter calling mockingbirds,
Their easy songs delighting jays,
But where they near, I turn them out -
I close my blinds and beg their leave -
Their banners tailored much too bright
On eyes just roused from heavy sleep.
Alights from out the maples' grove -
Abreast the unsown eastern fields,
They march a subtle, rising slope;
They share in banter at the square,
And ask the baker for a taste
Of breads and sweets all freshly pinched
And cooling on a window-pane;
They greet the maidens tending yards
Along the velvet uptown rows -
As if to beg a favor, knelt,
With tresses tied in buns and bows -
And press on further, slow and sure,
A touch of leisure in their gait:
Their laughter calling mockingbirds,
Their easy songs delighting jays,
But where they near, I turn them out -
I close my blinds and beg their leave -
Their banners tailored much too bright
On eyes just roused from heavy sleep.
This is a second submission for the Colors Contest at #Word-Smiths.
© 2012 - 2024 timeraider
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Though some changes were made to the piece, I believe it would have been fine as it were. I think people need to work out a meaning for themselves in poetry and stop trying to understand the Author's intention.
However I must say I did enjoy this piece. I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry as I tend to find it forced and often overly 'emo' for my taste, however this was well executed. I didn't pick up on it until 'rows' and 'bows' in the 3rd stanza. This is how rhyming poetry should be, imho. It should be about the rhythm and pace, about the flow, not a forced rhyme.
I find it almost corrupt of me to have posted the poem you commented on, as the correlations here could be seen as many. I find this piece sensual and warm. I see glimpses of Autumn, I can smell the fresh bread, I can understand the shift in emotion I get from this piece.
I think this is the best of your 2 submissions when it comes to the contest itself, I like both pieces equally outside of the contest, however for different reasons.
Good Luck.
However I must say I did enjoy this piece. I'm not a fan of rhyming poetry as I tend to find it forced and often overly 'emo' for my taste, however this was well executed. I didn't pick up on it until 'rows' and 'bows' in the 3rd stanza. This is how rhyming poetry should be, imho. It should be about the rhythm and pace, about the flow, not a forced rhyme.
I find it almost corrupt of me to have posted the poem you commented on, as the correlations here could be seen as many. I find this piece sensual and warm. I see glimpses of Autumn, I can smell the fresh bread, I can understand the shift in emotion I get from this piece.
I think this is the best of your 2 submissions when it comes to the contest itself, I like both pieces equally outside of the contest, however for different reasons.
Good Luck.