Sta.sh
I wish I could recall that sprightly dream
That tided me until I first awoke;
I wish, but never do recall, what shone
When nothing shone of all those suns I see
Today, as if today were but a seam
Between dimensions none have mapped or known.
Thus I should sleep, to wake - and there explore
Worlds I had strolled when all was lost in dream.
And if, instead, I find myself alone
Among a black and endless corridor
With none to show - or guide - my eye or hand,
Then I shall lament my rush to slumber,
And count myself just one of a thousand
Reigning kings of time and oblivion.
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One of the features of the poem that I initially disliked but realized the effect of was the repetition of words in short succession--words such as recall, shone, today--in that first stanza. Put into the context though, these words are like the narrator's attempt to recall that happy dream. The reiteration of the words serve as a direct, physical symbol of the narrator plumbing their memory and trying to repeat the dream again. This is a very good representation of how different elements of a poem combine to create the meaning.
Overall, the poem is as well-written as they come. With crisp language and an excellent sense of the prosody of poetry, this one is going in my favorites.
To Sleep, Perchance to Dream,
Parsat
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