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What soft dreams we lay -
What soft dreams, like infants put to rest -
Frightfully bare, and compromised,
Our kisses on their breasts.

We close our eyes and trust them safe,
Kept 'til break of dawn -
Forgetting that the night is fickle,
And dutifully, as long -

It safeguards some,
Covets others,
Moved by neither coin nor threat
Nor anguished mother's cry.
This came to me quite suddenly this evening. I hope you enjoy it!
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Given 2012-11-19
What Soft Dreams by *timeraider Gentle, Lullaby -like simplicity all rolled into this short poem. ( Featured by BeccaJS )
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shakrain Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
Wow, am I the only one who thought this was incredibly dark? Made more horrifying by the sweet-and-cute tone, like that cursed song about the baby in the treetop. It's delightful, I love it!
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timeraider Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I certainly hope you were not alone in thinking that. I enjoyed your comments - thank you so much for stopping by and reading.
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UnderTheWildMoon Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
I'm glad you got a daily for this.

This poem has a quiet melody to it that inspires the sound of a music box in my ears. It exists, when I read it, like a memory from infancy. This piece is passionate, innocent, bright and dark all at once.

I always remark on how your style intrigues me, and I'll say it again today: your fixed form work is lovely, beautiful, something I was never good at writing. Lovely to see and a pleasure to read.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Both for reading and for posting these lovely remarks.
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Synmor Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
I love this poem, I find it so eerily sad because I can relate on the level of dreams that slip away in the night, and also at once on the level of the child, the new hope, that dies in the night.
The rhythm is haunting and soft, like a lullaby, and your word choice follows suit with the trend. Definite favorite. Beautiful.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Those are lovely comments. Thank you so much.
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shadowsinthemoonlite Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional Writer
Amazing...
I love writing. Words are my life and love, and honestly, your words touched my heart. I've read many a well written poem in my day, but yours really takes the literature cake by far. It's beautiful, and it even brought a tear to my eye. Needless to say, I favortied this. :) It's absolutely amazing.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading! And for the wonderful feedback. I am happy to hear my poem affected you.
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ArandomMoon Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow...I couldn't help but think that it's related to a mother and her baby. when you described dreams like a baby and when I got to the last line about the anguished mother's cry, I thought it's like the mom lost her baby in some way through the night. Gosh, the firat stanza was like a lullaby and then the dream turned into a nightmare. BEAUTIFUL!
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading, and for the wonderful feedback!
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ArandomMoon Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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SuzanneMoseley Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Chills, I felt chills
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading, and for sharing that.
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AdaMarieYoder Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Love this poem, it's rhythm and rhyme.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw. Thank you.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
This is beautiful, such lyrical language but with real thought and care into what each word conjures up. Delightful.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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stryker99 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Rather ethereal and eerie, in a good way.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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spoonlesspear Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is really beautiful C: the words flow so nicely. It's so aesthetic!
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw. Thank you very much.
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WorldwideImage Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wonderful poetry...I love dreams too, and spontaneous poetry :D
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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WorldwideImage Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome!
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BabyBunnyBun Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww. This is really nice. :happycry:
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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BabyBunnyBun Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome. :aww:
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading!
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Mordial33 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a problem!
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yet another DD - is a simple 'congratulations' really enough?! :D
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It certainly is! More than enough. Thank you.
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
As always! <3
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trail-of-rainbows Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
I love it so much! I wish I could write things half as good as that.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. And who says you can't?
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trail-of-rainbows Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
I'm rubbish at writing poetry!
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Bebopboy Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
This is beautiful, well done.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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SapphireLily Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Simply gorgeous! It rolls so effortlessly off the tongue and the comparison between our dreams as children is brilliant. I'm so glad this got a DD. <3
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree with ^Beccalicious' original interpretation, "Gentle, Lullaby-like simplicity all rolled into this short poem." The words seem to roll of your tongue while reading it, with a sing-songy rhythm. Lovely work, sweetie. And congrats on the DD! :squee:
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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Astor1977 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Nice. I like this.
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I couldn't ask for a better compliment. Thank you.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Congratulations for the Daily D... absolutely deserved ins pades, John!!

And thrice vindicated too in my believe in both your poet's voice and your skill so thoroughly demonstrated here. I couldn't be more pleased for you!

Have submitted this to #DD-Catalogue for you
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much. It has been a long, strange week for me, but this is a huge bright spot.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
correction of typo: in spades
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day! : )
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timeraider Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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